How To Improve The Ending

After my feedback, I reviewed it and picked up on the biggest point given, that my ending isn't as strong as it could have been. So I threw some ideas about with Mrs Allison (my teacher) and have decided that I should leave the plot with some sort of cliffhanger or some sort of dark and rather ominous ending; for example, I could have him looking back over maps or making some sort of homemade bomb.

Also, instead of him throwing images of houses of parliament on the fire, i will have him throwing a political front page/newspaper on the fire as it links back to the shot at the table.

Feedback on Animatic

I showed my animatic to some members of my class, including teachers and I got the following feedback.

My animatic is slightly out of time with the song, this is because I was editing to the shot lengths (correct to the nearest second) but this is not the way to go about doing this, as I need to edit to the beat. I will ensure that I do this properly for my actual video.

Also, I need to think more about the lighting necessary for the high contrast images that I require. I will need to do this by using strong, white lighting.

I need to make my shots fast and use lots of visual effects in order to make some of the longer shots more effective and to keep the viewers attention.

I also need to make sure that the audience are aware of the plot, as some of the fire shots come before the shots where the main character builds the fire. upon reflection, this will be my biggest issue but i will overcome it.

This is my ANIMATIC

Storyboard for my Production

Storyboard for Polarized by Carcass

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My Props List

In The Woods:
Sticks
Fire
Paper
Bag
Lighter
Yellow Pages
Flower
Shirt (unwanted)
Log
Pictures of politics
Necklace (sweets one maybe?)

Band Shots:
Guitar (& Pick)
Drums
Microphone

In The House:
Remote
News Paper
Television
Cigarettes
Can
Door
Bag
Drawers of stuff
Shoes
Sofa
Table

My Shot List

In The Woods:
LS – Enters the wood. Jump Cuts
XLS – Pan. Establishment shot
XLS – Walks away from cam. Jumps again
LS – arrives at fire site
LS – Puts bag down & opens it
CU – bag open & pulls paper out
TS – tracking through woods, to man
LA – screws up paper. Throws it to floor
XLS – builds up fire – paper and twigs
LA – throws more sticks on fire
CU – fire unlit – put logs on it
LS – puts more logs on fire…
XCU – …to face – lip synch (CARE)
LS – guy lights fire
CA – fire catching
LS – takes seat on log to wait for flames
MS – sits in wood (in thought) X2
XLS – stands next to large fire
CU – yellow pages – flicks pages
CU – looks up to camera
POV – pictures of politics
CU – praying next to fire
XCU – puts flower on fire
MS – puts shirt on fire
LS – walks away from fire – jump cuts
LS > XCU – sits on log – zoom to smirk/side smile
360 – rotate around fire – jumps cuts?
XLS – gets up from log & walks off
OS – walks off & leaves fire burning
TMS – tracking medium through woods – jump cuts
XLS - leave gate from woods
XCU – fire shots (X11)
XCU – bruning flower
XCU – mentioned props on fire

Band Shots:
XCU – guitar (X4)
XCU – Drums (X2) – Crash (X1)
XCU - Lip Synch (first lyrics) (CAUSE-zoom in on mouth)(don’t want…p)(tell me…you wear)(just don’t… careeee)(don’t believe… what you…)(don’t… days)(I just don’t care!)(polarized!)
CU – profile. Lip synch
LS - drummer

In The House:
CU – chap face (X4)
MS – behind table with remote & paper
XCU – picks up remote
OS – turns on news
CU – tv says news
CU – angry/confused look on face
CU - Rummaging through drawers (X5)
MS – puts things in bag
XCU – picks up shoes
OSTS – over shoulder tracking - goes out of door
LS – out of door with bag
XLS – walks down road & kicks can
CU – gets out a cigarette
XCU – crushes & drops cigarette
LS – goes in door
MS – sits down behind table again
CU – smile on his face
MS – behind table
LS – gets up & walk out of shot
LS – lays on sofa to sleep

Random Shots & Cutaways:
XCU - Name on paper
XCU - Paper headline (political)
XCU – roughly drawn pentagram (rotate?)
N/A – Black to white fade (X2)
N/A – plain white